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xu do kakne lenu viska
fi le murse gusni
fe noi mi rinsa ne
zvati le lidne murse
ne le ganra dasri .e carmi tarci

xu ka'eku do viska seems like a better first line. (Except I suspect there ought to be a better member of CAhA than ka'e for this.)

There are other things to worry about... like fe noi mi rinsa ne zvati isn't grammatical. We have noi not part of a sumti, and ne linking a brivla...

Proves that you can't afford to ignore selma'o in learning Lojban :-) — mi'e nitcion, who patches up the foregoing to:

xu do kakne lenu viska
fi le murse gusni
fe le noi mi rinsa ku'o
zvati be le lidne murse
ne le ganra dasri .e le carmi tarci

Or:

''caxuku do dorcfa
darviska le fanmo
vacmurse se cliva
je seljgi be ma'a''

(I much prefer la mertut. dontutra myself.)



A loose translation of the original words, an 18th century drinking song:

fi la nakrion. seka'a le
tsani poi se zutse la ny.
fa lei bersa be lenu panpi
cu benji le xe cpedu
be lenu la ny. stidi
joi stani le by
.i vizykla fi le gleki laldo xelso
fa lu voksa .e zgica'a
na za'o smaji
.i mi te jbera fi do fe
le mi cmene joi stidi do
.ije mi ctuca do lenu jmina
le venus. jbarnmirtu
fi le bakys. vanju

I've decided that, of the ways to make 'Anacreon' fit the rythm in lojban, 'nakrion' is better than 'ankrion' or 'anakron'.

Eh, rhythm? I sure can't sing that rendering, so I don't see why it matters. And while normally I wouldn't be nasty about grammar errors, if you're going to use Votes Of No Confidence in Lojban like laldo, at least learn Lojban grammar well enough beforehand not to say "voksa .e zgica'a". Try this: (http://www.bcpl.net/~etowner/anacreon.html)

fi la .anakreon. nevi le tsani
noi gleki se zutse vo'e
fa so'o bersa tarti nelci be leka zgisarxe
cu benji lo ve cpedu
belenu vo'e selsidbymukti je bandu vo'a
.i bazibo le di'e danfu cu se tirna
gi'e se cusku le gleki ke tolcitno xelso
.i lu .i doi voksa jonai jgita jonai flani
ko co'u smaji
.i mi curmi le nu do pilno lemi cmene kei
gi'e ji'a selsidbymukti do
.i mi ctuca fi do lenu ji'a simsa mi
lenu jmina le la venus. spatrmirtle
le la bakxus. vanjyspati li'u



doi voksa doi jgita doi flani - when you are done with that you are only addressing the flan.

The Refgramm strongly implies so, at least; so altered.


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