History: The Prophet Translation, Dubious Places

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Please add new lines to the ''top'' of the table. The format of Location is <Chapter>:<Sentence> ||__Date__|__Location__|__Text__|__Comment__|__Suggestion__|__Corrected__ 06 May 2006|1:33|__...lo cliva be lori te plixa...__|Bad {ri}, point to ma or mi, not the leavers|The leavers were taged {ko'e} when they were introduced so {lo ko'e etc.}| 06 May 2006|1:31|__fe lu xu le nu cliva djedi cu ba du le nu jmaji djedi__|Bad use of {djedi}? I think these translate to "the event of leaving which takes (zo'e) days"|I think {sedetri} would be good here| 06 May 2006|1:22|__...catlu cu se renro ti'a mi.__|is casting a glance malglico?|Remove the renro and transform this into "a brief look back" or something?| 06 May 2006|1:20|__...lonu mi cikra...__|cikra isn't a word|{cikna} = awake| 06 May 2006|1:20|__...do klama ce'i lonu...__|why {ce'i} (percentage)?|remove {ce'i}?| 06 May 2006|1:20|__.i so'eroi do te falnu...__|{falnu} is a thing (sail) not an event (sailing)|{tu'a nunfalnu}? we want the event associated with a sail...| 06 May 2006|1:19|__...doi ctaru sebevri...__|should be a {.i} before the second doi?|I need to check the refgrmr| 06 May 2006|1:19|__...po mi tcesau mamta|no conection between {mi} and {tcesau mamta}|{le mi etc.}? or find a connective to put between {mi} and etc.| 06 May 2006|1:18|__...cu krixu...__|krixu isn't a word|{krixa} = cried out| 06 May 2006|1:17|__...leko'a bloti goi ko'e klama le marbi .i ko'a viska le nu leko'a bloti goi ko'e cu klama le marbi kei...__|Repeated section and double {goi}|Remove repeated section and/or remove second {goi} and replace with {ko'e}| 06 May 2006|1:2|__...le nu xruti bloti kei...__|{xruti bloti} is a tanru, not an event|Get rid of the {nu}, or change to {lonu le bloti cu xruti kei}| 06 May 2006|1:2|__...ko'a cpare le cmana ze'o le tcadu bitmu lo ka galtu.|A bad x4 for {cpare} (the tool for climbing)|Get rid of {loka galtu}| 06 May 2006|1:2|__...le paremoi nanca .e le zemoi djedi...__|x1 of year/day is the thing of duration, not the duration|Add {se} to get to the number slot of year/day| 06 May 2006|1:1|__...ke'a cerni pe'a ke'a mo'u le pare senanca...__|What stops the morning from getting tangled with the ending of the 12 years?|Add a {ku'o} to end the relative clause| 06 May 2006|1:1|__...bevri ko'a...__|variable referanced before assignment (ko'a with no attaching goi)|Should be {vo'a} to point at {denpa} x1 or {ko'a} should be assigned to {la .almustafas}| 18 Jan 2006|1:1|__...le tcadu me'e la .orfaliz.__|These are two separate, unconnected terms. Also, la .orfaliz. cu tcadu .i zo .orfaliz. cu cmene | {le tcadu po'u la .orfaliz.} or {le tcadu pe me'e zo .orfaliz.}| 18 Jan 2006|1:2|__...ko'a cpare le cmana ze'o le tcadu bitmu lo ka galtu__|"...he climbed the hill without the city walls"%%%1. 'Hill' is {cmama'a} (jbovlaste). %%%2. Is {loka galtu} really required for "climbing" in this context?| ko'a mo'i ga'u cpare le cmama'a ze'o le tcadu bitmu| 18 Jan 2006|1:1|__...denpa le sexruti bloti le tcadu me'e la .orfaliz. le pu'u bevri ko'a le daplu pe le ko'a vejbena kei__|{le pu'u bevri ko'a...} fits x4 of {denpa}, 'activity interrupted by waiting', so it means "waited, while not <something> carrying him to the island of his birth". In fact, this phrase must correspond to the ship, not waiting. |It's better to attach this restriction to {le bloti} with {poi}, but it disrupts the original structure of the sentence.| 18 Jan 2006|1:1|__...pu denpa le sexruti bloti le tcadu...__|1.{le tcadu} fits x3 of {denpa}, 'state of waiting', so it means "waited being a town".|use BAI modal.| ||