For errata relating to the current edition of the CLL, see CLL, aka Reference Grammar, Errata. For errata related to the 4th Baseline Grammar, see CLL PEG Errata.
General considerations
Terminology
- Lojban terms are used for most parts of speech, except for quantifiers and descriptors. Needlessly inconsistent?
- In particular (this list is not exhaustive),
- quantifier->something with {snicne}? (though personally I (zort) disagree with the veljvo of {snicne})
- quantified variable->something with {snicne}?
- descriptor->gadri
- description->gadri sumti (I haven't actually seen this used)
- attitudinal->cnima'o
- terminator->fa'orma'o
- modal->sumti tcita
- vocative->jikma'o? rinsyma'o?
- evidential->veljivma'o?
- A lot of this terminology is used without being defined. We should formally define the terminology that is import to understanding the grammar and syntax of Lojban, preferably in a sidebar outside of the main text.
- The general idea of terminators and particularly elision is never discussed as such in the book. Chapter 5.5 is the first mention of a elidable terminators, with the first use of the phrase elidable terminator occurring in Chapter 5.7. I think the concept of terminators, cmavo opening grammatical constructs, and elision should be dealt with in it's own section. At the very least, the construct should be defined.1
Teaching Material and Examples
- There should be more illustration and diagrams. For instance, with termsets, show with lines and/or colour coding how two sentences are equivalent. See The Japanese Wikipedia for some other examples.
- Minimum 2 sentence explanation for every cmavo (excluding ones that are part of a pattern like {fo'i}, of course). Chapter 13 is particularly guilty of the length of the explanation of a cmavo seemingly being inversely proportional to the number of cmavo explained in the section; some just get two gloss words worth of explanation, and it's rather opaque.
Pedagogy
- Chapter 4 needs to go somewhere else, ideally near the end. It's crazy to give all that crap to newbies.
- It is a specification, not a tutorial. It makes sense to start with orthography, follow with morphology, and then the continue with the rest of the language. mi'e.djeims.
- Maybe the fact that denpabu are optional in writing should be reinforced, since people seem to forget that. Right now it's only mentioned once, early in the book, in a little paragraph in chapter 3. It could be said again in chapter 19 and/or chapter 4.
Topic Suggestions
Each of these topics is important to the CLL, but not strictly contained to a single chapter or Section. Ideally, each of these topics would be reviewed for consistency throughout the text.
Lujvo
Chapter 4
Section 5
It seems like the writers of the CLL originally did really just think of lujvo as being shortened forms of tanru who have been given an explicit meaning instead of the vague meaning that tanru have.
Typographical
It would be better if numbered were not only chapters and sections, but also sentences like in the Bible.
- Exactly what would be the benefit of adding "verse" numbers? We can easily cite specific sentences without the need to do this. For example, citing from the online refgram: 9.3.7.2 (Chapter 9, section 3, paragraph 7, sentence 2): "Therefore, it is perfectly all right to scramble...." Or for examples: 9.3-3.3 (Chapter 9, section 3, example 3.3): "3.3) klama fa mi fi la .atlantas. ...." mi'e.aionys.
The brush-stroke placeholders for logical connectives should be written in "blackboard bold" instead, to make it look more form
- I remember this section being confusing to me because of the brushstroke letters. Suddenly the book became much more formal (in the mathematical sense) and I didn't know what that signified. Writing them as of "-a -e -i -o" might be better, since the hyphen indicates they are not themselves words, without introducing a strange new typographical convention. The book already uses hyphens to show that rafsi are not words, so this would be consistent. Or since "a e i o" actually are words, perhaps they could be used directly. mi'e.paldanyli.
The header or footer of each page should include the chapter number along with the title, to make fully referencing examples easier. (i.e., when you see example 1.7, you can look at that page and know that it is example 5.1.7, without having to scroll back to the table of contents to find the name of the chapter.)
Chapter Suggestions
Chapter 3
Section 6
- Section 6, restriction no. 2 already forbids 8 of the 12 consonant pairs that are forbidden by restriction no. 3; perhaps it's better to just explicitly forbid the pairs "cs", "jz", "sc" and "zj" like in the last restriction.
- I kind of like that the explanation for those pairs being forbidden is given, even if it includes things already forbidden. I would like it slightly better if the word "sibilant" were used. Perhaps for consistency the reason could be given for the last restriction instead of listing seemingly-random pairs. .imi'e .skaryzgik.
Section 9
- A bit after example 9.5, the explanation of how to stress words is ambiguous. A possible incorrect interpretation:
set stressed_syllable = penultimate_syllable;
while (stressed_syllable contains "l|m|n|r|y"
&& stressed_syllable != first_syllable) {
stressed_syllable = syllable_before(stressed_syllable);
}None of the examples demonstrate that only syllables containing "l|m|n|r" as syllables on their own are to be skipped, nor that skipped syllables are to be ignored before you start counting as opposed to skipped while you're counting. The following examples would make it clearer: {djanatyn} is pronounced {DJAnatyn} (not {djaNAtyn}), and {patrica} is pronounced {paTRIca} (not {PAtrica}).
Section 12
- The tengwar table should use actual tengwar in addition to their names, since we now have Unicode (CSUR) and good fonts.
- The Cyrillic letters given map to 'abcdefgijklmnoprstuvxyz'? That doesn't seem totally obvious. mi'e.djeims.
Chapter 4
Section 7
- In the procedure for making a non-Lojban word into a valid Stage 3 fu'ivla, double consonants are to be eliminated before the sounds are to be converted to their closest Lojban equivalents, but it is possible that consecutive consonants have different sounds (like in 'eccentric'). So these actions should swap places. The same goes for section 8, in the procedure for Lojbanizing a name.
Chapter 5
Section 14
- The three letter language abbreviations were probably used to save space, but now that we have actual tables we can safely write the full names of the languages.
Section 16
- The big list of the 40 possible groupings of "pretty little girls school" could be made into a nice, clean table. It would look something like this:
| ...melbi | melbi...cmalu | cmalu...nixli | nixli...ckule | ckule... | grouping | translation
|
| | | | | | ((pretty little) girl) school | school for girls who are beautifully small
|
| je | | | | | ((pretty and little) girl) school | school for girls who are beautiful and small
|
| bo | je | | | | ((pretty little) and girl) school | school for girls and for beautifully small things
|
| ke | | ke'e je | | | ((pretty little) girl) and school | thing which is a school and a beautifully small girl
|
| | je | je | | | ((pretty and little) and girl) school | school for things which are beautiful, small, and girls |
Chapter 10
- It would be nice if there was a template for compound tenses around the end of the chapter, like the template for compound cnima'o in chapter 13 section 8.
Chapter 13
Section 15
- Couldn't the {se'u}s be elided since their sumti are before their selbri?
Chapter 16
Section 9
- It says "for no x" (noda) is the same as "it is false for some x" (naku su'oda). I (mi'e zort) interpret "it is false for some x" as "there is an x such that it is false" (su'oda naku), not "it is false that for some x it is true" (naku su'oda), so it should be changed to "it is false that for some x".
Chapter 18
Section 19
This section is very similar to Chapter 19 Section 7. I believe the information in these sections should be consolidated into a single section.
Chapter 19
Section 7
This section is very similar to Chapter 18 Section 19. I believe the information in these sections should be consolidated into a single section.