History: se zasti lo ninmu poi cisma

Source of version: 3 (current)

the original by Edward Lear: ~pre~ There was an old lady from Riga Who rode with a smile on a tiger They came back from the ride With the lady inside And a smile on the face of the tiger ~/pre~ As always, translating poetry is stupidly pointless, but leads to some very lojbykai stuff. ((greg.|I)) would be grateful for any better translation which truly rimes. ~pre~ se zasti lo ninmu poi cisma ca le nu lo tirxu cu xelkla .i ri ra pu xruti je ji'a se nenri .i po'o le tirxu cu cisma ~/pre~ ''Should {terkla} be {xelkla}? I thought of the tiger as being her vehicle, not her place of origin. --((pne))'' *of course, I was working on something like {te litru} to rime with {tirxu} at one point and couldn't make it work ; the {te} stayed over when I changed to {klama} --((greg.)) ---- ''I (mi'e noras.) can make almost-rhyme if I mangle the meaning a bit:'' ~pre~ mi penmi lo ninmu poi virnu .i ny cmila co selbei lo tirxu .i ba le nunpenmi le ninmu cu nenri le tirxu noi cisma co kirclu ~/pre~ ''With just-as-mangled back-translation to English that rhymes:'' ~pre~ I once met a woman quite daring who (smiling), a tiger was bearing. But after we "bye"-ed She wound up inside, and the tiger a full smile was wearing. ~/pre~ *Nice, I'm not quite sure about all those cute {co}'s though, especially the last one. I'm overawed by what is either a mastery of the vocabulary or a very quick eye for making lujvo which fit a pattern. The VC*C rhyming is nice! - mi'e ((greg))