History: se zasti lo ninmu poi cisma

Source of version: 3 (current)

the original by Edward Lear:

~pre~
There was an old lady from Riga
Who rode with a smile on a tiger
They came back from the ride
With the lady inside
And a smile on the face of the tiger
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As always, translating poetry is stupidly pointless, but leads to some very lojbykai stuff. ((greg.|I)) would be grateful for any better translation which truly rimes.

~pre~
se zasti lo ninmu poi cisma
ca le nu lo tirxu cu xelkla
.i ri ra pu xruti
je ji'a se nenri
.i po'o le tirxu cu cisma
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''Should {terkla} be {xelkla}? I thought of the tiger as being her vehicle, not her place of origin. --((pne))''
*of course, I was working on something like {te litru} to rime with {tirxu} at one point and couldn't make it work ; the {te} stayed over when I changed to {klama} --((greg.))

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''I (mi'e noras.) can make almost-rhyme if I mangle the meaning a bit:''

~pre~
mi penmi lo ninmu poi virnu
.i ny cmila co selbei lo tirxu
.i ba le nunpenmi
le ninmu cu nenri
le tirxu noi cisma co kirclu
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''With just-as-mangled back-translation to English that rhymes:''

~pre~
I once met a woman quite daring
who (smiling), a tiger was bearing.
But after we "bye"-ed
She wound up inside,
and the tiger a full smile was wearing.
~/pre~

*Nice, I'm not quite sure about all those cute {co}'s though, especially the last one. I'm overawed by what is either a mastery of the vocabulary or a very quick eye for making lujvo which fit a pattern. The VC*C rhyming is nice! - mi'e ((greg))
History: se zasti lo ninmu poi cisma

Source of version: 3 (current)

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